Introductory paragraph

First, the reason choose "Ploblem solution" is the best paragraph which I have ever written.I have confidence to this paragraph so I wanted to be perfect it.

Second,the reason choose"My opinion"is that I like this theme.I was interested in putting on make up in the train so I wanted to think about it again.

Finaly,I chose "Discribe a place"why writing this paragraph is easy for me and it had few mistakes.

Discribe a place final draft

Japan has the great four seasons by which temperature,stars of sky,views,foods,creature and clothes change-spring,summer,autumn,winter-.I think they are just some of good points of Japan,which has a lot of good points.In Kyoto,we can be interrested in Sakura in Spring,Momiji in Autumn.Especially I love Sakura of Arashiyama and Tetsugakunomichi and Momiji of Kiyomizudera.In Okinawa we can enjoy swimming in the sea in summer.In Hokkaido we can see beautiful good grasses in summer and ski and snowboad in beautiful snow in winter.There are a lot of nice places to visit in Japan and Japanese foods are very popular for foreiner as delicious foods.When I went abroad,i think so strongly.I like foods,people,nature and fashon of Japan.

My opnion final draft

Women shouldn't put on make up in the train.It isn't their private spaces but public ones.Some people might have no ploblem about putting on make up by women because putting on make up in the train doesn't disturb to around the people. It isn't loud like calling by celphone and talking with friends in the train.However other people must be hating about it because women putting up make up aren't beautiful very much.So it is unconfortable for around the people.I think most of women understand that and all women should understand that.However they do that or must do that because when they get up late,they have no time of putting on make up but must put on make up.So they cannot help putting on make up in the train.Probably they don't always dothat.I think they know putting on make up in the train is a bad manner and they should decrease.

Problem solution Final draft

Global warming is a very serious problem all over the world because it causes climate changes -especially rising temperature-.When temperature rise,ice of North of pole melt and surface of sea rise.When ice of North pole melt,animals of North pole -white bears,seals and penguins-can't walk on the ice.So they can't hunt.On the other hand,when surface of sea rise,some of small Islands will sink in the sea in the future.



One solution to the problem of Global warming is to cut down exhaust gas of cars.When we stop cars,we should turn off their engine.Secondly,we should set low temperature of air conditioner.If you set low temperature,you can exhaust less gas.finally,we should reduce gabages like papers and bulky refuse because CO2 is exhausted when we burn them.CO2 is the biggest cause f Global warming.So we must recycle and reuse various things-for example,plastic bag,PET bottle and so on- and we must not forget to use a thing for a long time. If people of all over the world cooperate,we may stop Global warming.

Suma

I went to Suma beach in Hyogo by car.

I go there every year.

The sea isn`t beautiful but the sky is very good so I like.

I like the house of beach and the mood of beach.

I can feel summer!

I want to be dark.So I put on sun oil and slept on the beach.

My skin borned.I feel ache very much.

I swam without Ukiwa.So I was terrible a little.

It was fine day but I quarraled to my boyfriend.

So I didn`t enjoy very much.

I will go in August again.

I must be fun!!

Problem solution

Global warming is a very serious problem all over the world because it causes climate changes -especially rising temperature-.When temperature rise,ice of North pole melt and surface of sea rise.When ice of North pole melt,animals of North pole-white bear,seals and penguins-can't walk on the ice.So they can't hunt.On the other hand,when surface of sea rise,some of small Island will sink in the future.



one solution to the plroblem of Global warming is to cut down exhaust gas of cars.When cars stop,we should turn off engine of cars.Second,we should set low temperature of cooler.If you set low temperatuer,you can exhaust less gas.Finally,we should reduce gabages because CO2 was exhausted when we burn gabages.CO2 is the biggest cause of Global warming.So we must recycle and reuse various things.For example,plastic bag,PET bottle and so on.If people of all over the world cooperate,we may stop Global warming.

Opinion draft2

Before making-up a woman is very different from after making- up her.Before making-up a woman is natural.She has clear eyes and high nose.I think before making-up is also beautiful.However,her clear eyes became bigger and her neck became longer.So after making-up face became cooler than before.I like both before face and after one.Then I think a lot of singers and actresses also use this computer skill.

Drinking

I went to Umeda for drinking with cram school for university entrance examination's friends on Monday.

We haven`t met for four months.I missed them.

My crammer life was very happy.I made a lot of good friends and a teacher.

We were very loud in the bar.We were very very laughed.

Lady`s exept me got drunk.It was funny.

We spent little three hours but I had a nice time.

We will travel somewhere in this summer vacation.

I`m looking forward to next 44 class perty!

Josh,Can you join us??

My Opinion draft2

Women shouldn`t make-up in the train.It isn`t their private spaces but public ones in the train.Some people might be no problem about making-up by women.However other people must hate about it.Because women like this aren`t beautiful very much.For example,when they face to put Masukara on thier eye hair.I think almost women understand that.All women should understand that.However they do that or must do that.When they get up late,they have no time of making-up but must make-up.So they cannot help making-up in the train.Probably they don't always do that.I think they know making-up in the train is a bad manner.So bad manner will decrease less and less.I hope so.